Home for the Holidays
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Home for the Holidays
Title: Home for the Holidays
Author: Alexa/ab103, aka Greg Garrets
Fandom: Buzz Lightyear of Star Command and Cosmic Dust
Character(s) / Pairing(s): Alfred Cosmic, et al.
Rating: K+, PG
Word Count: Approximately 11,600 total
Warning(s): None, I think.
Disclaimer: Buzz Lightyear of Star Command and related property and ideas are owned by Disney/Pixar. Cosmic Dust and and related property and ideas are owned by me.
Summary: Alfred has a job he does every Holiday season before returning home to Beta. However, this year, can he decide whether Beta truly is his home?
Most of this was written over past few days, very early in the morning when I should had been in bed. You might be able to tell which particular areas were written under such circumstances...
I didn't really bother to edit this, so I apologize for any mistakes you might see. Also, sorry if the story seems rushed or lacking in any of the places (especially the end), but I wanted to get this over with... Enjoy?
Section One (4 parts) - http://blueglows.livejournal.com/20248.html
Section Two (1 part) - http://blueglows.livejournal.com/20600.html
Section Three (4 parts) - http://blueglows.livejournal.com/20826.html
Author: Alexa/ab103, aka Greg Garrets
Fandom: Buzz Lightyear of Star Command and Cosmic Dust
Character(s) / Pairing(s): Alfred Cosmic, et al.
Rating: K+, PG
Word Count: Approximately 11,600 total
Warning(s): None, I think.
Disclaimer: Buzz Lightyear of Star Command and related property and ideas are owned by Disney/Pixar. Cosmic Dust and and related property and ideas are owned by me.
Summary: Alfred has a job he does every Holiday season before returning home to Beta. However, this year, can he decide whether Beta truly is his home?
Most of this was written over past few days, very early in the morning when I should had been in bed. You might be able to tell which particular areas were written under such circumstances...
I didn't really bother to edit this, so I apologize for any mistakes you might see. Also, sorry if the story seems rushed or lacking in any of the places (especially the end), but I wanted to get this over with... Enjoy?
Section One (4 parts) - http://blueglows.livejournal.com/20248.html
Section Two (1 part) - http://blueglows.livejournal.com/20600.html
Section Three (4 parts) - http://blueglows.livejournal.com/20826.html
Alexa
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Re: Home for the Holidays
Okay, I'm going to give off my reactions for the first part...
- Spoiler:
WHAT? Alfred built the---no way! THAT is cool.
(snickers at Mira's comment about Santa)
..Do I sense a bit of a Danny Phantomness in the scene where Mira asks him to repeat himself? I mean the part of Maddie and Vlad's conversation in Maternal Instincts, and the part of Jazz and Vlad's conversation in Secret Weapons?
"Aaand, so far had just ended." Is there supposed to be a 'that' there, or not? It seems a bit awkward to me....
Naughty, naugthy, Mira! Tangean brain squeezes are a BAD thing. xD
You included Ty and Simone?! Awww....that's cute! :3 Thank you!
Time favors Santa? That makes sense to me! ^^
Btw, the Protector will know Santa too!
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Re: Home for the Holidays
Fox Storm wrote:"Aaand, so far had just ended." Is there supposed to be a 'that' there, or not? It seems a bit awkward to me....
May I ask what you mean by 'that'? As in, where you think it's supposed to go...? *confused* It's supposed to be a reference to the line just before Nebula calling "Cosmic!".
Everything was going well so far.
"Cosmic!"
Aaand, so far had just ended.
But, if you think it should still be changed, just clarify what you mean and I'll fix it. :3
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Re: Home for the Holidays
Oh....I read that wrong then. Never mind! Ignore me then. x0
I think if you're going to do that, maybe just make 'so far' bold so that the reader doesn't get confused...like I was, heh.
Other than that, you're doing fine! ^^
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Re: Home for the Holidays
I put it in quotations, to make it clearer. Thanks for the suggestion! 8D
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Re: Home for the Holidays
No problem! Glad I could help. ^^
And now...off to give off first impressions of the second part!
And now...off to give off first impressions of the second part!
- Spoiler:
Aw...Holidays Past Mira is sooo cute! :3
Wait, we get a chance to see Freddie boy's wife?...She sounds like an awesome princess!...aside from Mira, of course. xD
The scene with Nebula and Freddie boy almost made me cry...that's so sad! Poor Nebula...
Aw...robotics lessons for Alfred?...how sweet...
(snickers) Off to our next adventure!
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Re: Home for the Holidays
The scene with "Nebula and Freddie boy" (as you put it) was actually one of my favorites to write for this thing. 8D I thought it would be great to have that interaction... Glad it worked to my advantage!
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Re: Home for the Holidays
It sure did! I thought it was cute...and really sad...poor blokes. Although the eggnog thing was a nice touch...makes me want to never, ever go near that stuff....<_<......>_>
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Re: Home for the Holidays
Well, they DO make non-alcoholic eggnog... But, as a rule, never get drinks from a punchbowl when at a party. You don't know what people might put it in. It's best to get unopened bottled or canned drinks! 8D
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Re: Home for the Holidays
SO true! But still...I don't like eggnog much anyways. xD
Now for my first impressions of the final piece!
Now for my first impressions of the final piece!
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Ah, Holidays Present is the same as the Space Ranger Mira with her mannerisms and all?..Pffft!
Ah, brother...XR and XL will never learn, will they?
"... Bakit ba naman kailangang lumisan pa? / Tanging hangad ko lang ay makapiling ka." Holidays Past recited. "This is a song from Terania. You know it, don't you?"
"Why the need to leave? / My only wish is to be with you..." Alfred nodded. "Yes, I know it." This part tugged at me a bit...poor guy...
Wait, wait, wait...TIME HIMSELF IS HOLIDAYS FUTURE?! Sweet!
I get a chance to see him in action! Whoot!
...Wow, Alfred sure knows Time too well, doesn't he? xD
Yay for approval! ^^
Aww....I love Santa in the BLoSC world. He. Is. Awesome. Enough said.
And I love the peck Mira gave Alfred...that was cute! :3
Aww...I loved Alfred's journey to Nebula's house...and how he greeted his dad!
Awww...AWESOME GIFT IDEA! I loved that scene...I'm feeling warm inside...
AWWWWW....Cutest. Ending. Ever.
This was an awesome story, my friend! You did a very great job! It made me feel so warm and fuzzy inside, perfect for a wonderful Holiday story. Well done!
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Re: Home for the Holidays
Oh, shoot! That part that you quoted called her "Holidays Past" instead of "Present"! I'd change that now, but for some reason, livejournal isn't loading for me. DX Oh well, I'll get to it later (if I remember).
I am so glad you like it! 8D It was a worry of mine whether or not it'd be approved, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! <3
I am so glad you like it! 8D It was a worry of mine whether or not it'd be approved, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! <3
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Oh...I didn't even notice that! I'm glad you did, though! xD
Heh, no worries! It's a winner in my book, Alexa, and it was a pleasure to read it! <3.
Heh, no worries! It's a winner in my book, Alexa, and it was a pleasure to read it! <3.
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